Yo guys id appreciate any advice to convert more ppl, here the link to the skool:
https://www.skool.com/pharma-6909
https://www.skool.com/pharma-6909
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straight forward and clean, i like it. could use some better photoshop skills
Clean
I like it
10 users nice you need to create a tiktok acc and get tiktokcels to buy it if you havent yet
really clean but work on better photoshop as
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That's how I got everyone, just TikTok keeps banning my accounts jfl
:( but goodluck bro is ur course good quality too?
I'd say so, I put a lot of time into the modules, more is coming
Nice man
Now promote it on tt
unironically a great way to make money
Bump price up to £50 & lock every new course behind a pay wall
Looks good
Looks nice did you do any promotion?
a bit but its pretty hard to when tiktok keeps banning/shadowbanning accounts
Well I can see many flaws tbh. "This is the spot if you’re actually trying to run real cycles, peptides, puberty protocols, nootropics stacks, whatever." Instant trust breaker. They might think you're just an Indian kid and it's not persuave, instead it's like scam shi. And the "whatever" at the end seems very unprofessional and low iq. And also, you didn't explain/introduce who you are, why should they trust you, how dyk that stuff.
You listed all the stuff which will be in there, but you didn't even say what will they become or how will be the outcomes.
And bro JFL at this again “You’re actually trying to run real cycles” is not an emotional opener. Like you gotta trigger their emotion. It's so simple like so low iq. You should hit the pain points, build desire and create urgency. These are the rules in copywriting.
And a very weak cta too. "And more" "More courses and updates rolling out weekly. Everything is organized and kept up to date" Bro try to make them urgent like one of the most simple and used one is 'before it's too late' ik it's very overused I just gave an example.
And bro the tone is so boring. No one will read even 2 lines if it's not persuave enough.
“Direct DM access 24/7” that's very low iq. Like if you want people to actually be persuaded, you should've something else like limited qna or call per week or wtv to be high value and ykwim.
Repetition of Checkmarks is very very bad bro. Change it.
Well as a copywriter, I analyzed it. And read it. And I'll try to write one for you. Btw there's no fucking proof of transformations. "Why tf would I trust him?" And ye, as a random person, I'd never even click on it or even read 2 lines of it, paying and joining is far away.
Btw ppl do this for money. And yeah, good work tho, sorry if you felt bad bro but that's the truth
Administrator seems like a ad, what do you recon?
yeah jfl its an ad bro
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